We Could Be Villains could be perfect if not for the fact that it is incredibly juvenile.
From poor characterization to poor scene structure, We Could Be Villains reads almost like Marvel fan fiction.
Why Should I Care?
McCullough has much potential with the storytelling, but the strangest thing was Rosemary. Rosemary is a little unbelievable right from the beginning. I appreciate that this girl is mindful of her surroundings and wary of her safety. However, there is no build to it. She is on her way to work when she believes a fictional character is stalking and trying to get to her.
When Ironfall finally does corner her into helping him, or he will kill her parents, Rosemary’s personality fails again. There is nothing charismatic about this character. Her dynamic with her parents makes the reader question their whole relationship. Honestly, I thought she was adopted and had superpowers. I was wrong on all counts. I’m still struggling to find out why she was so crucial to the villains because it made no sense.
Even her friend Sam was unbelievable. First, there is suspending your belief, and then there is this. He is in high school, and hacking into the school database is one thing; hacking into the CIA database? Now, that is a little far-fetched, considering he does not seem like a genius to that extent.
The characterization simply missed the mark. Rosemary’s parents were awful. They seem to not care about their daughter, creating this strained relationship that doesn’t pull the reader out.
Then there were the training segments and the fighting sequences. There was way too much showing and not enough telling.
As readers, we don’t need sentences such as “Punch. Duck. Dodge. Kick” on repeat. But, unfortunately, that is what we got. Every fight sequence was literal, telling the reader every character’s move. It took away from the pacing and the storytelling. It was boring.
We Could Be Villains felt very much like an unfinished first-draft screenplay. There were parts, such as the web forums, that were interesting, but on the whole, the novel fell flat and was lackluster at best.
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